i know in viewing and perceiving art every perspective is different. and for personal reasons this piece is a revolutionary concept to me because i remember it being something you showed me when i first joined The Raster Group. It literally does symbolize that small ray of hope and warmth representing anything encouraging and positive, in a life of dark desperation. I too like the colour change on this. :]
I really like the concept and colour palette of/in the piece but there are a couple of things that I think could use some attention:
1. The dove
- Try to use the motion/radial blurs to simulate the wing motion, Right now, it seems like the dove has four wings, two of which seem really unnatural.
- In the same area, the small balls of light bother me. I think if you randomized their location/size/opacity a bit more you would get a much more realistic look going.
2. The composition
- It seems you're using a lot of space that tells no story and the focal point (the head/dove) are crammed in a corner and really fight for space...
- I would either bring the whole thing to the left and down to give the dove more room OR increase the canvas size and re-adjust the positioning and spacing of the elements in the focal area.
Hope that helps :)
M
posted 14 Oct 2007
keith Thank you so much for such an excellent comment. Couldn't agree more. This was somewhat an older piece for me and my work has since changed quite a lot. I shall have to revisit this some day I think.
An older piece.
